The feedback I got on my previous post was relatively positive. One thing I changed for the second pitch is including some recent information about parking that was released a few days ago. I also cleaned up the wording a little bit to make it flow better. The most important feedback I got was on my attire. People really liked that I was dressed formally so I continued that into this pitch as well.
Hey William,
ReplyDeleteYou did very well explaining the problem and your solution. Your pitch flowed very well which I see is something you worked on so great job on improving! I also like that you dressed formally because it makes it seem professional. I think your idea has a lot of potential and can be very beneficial on campus!
William,
ReplyDeleteHaving a good business idea is great but you must also be able to communicate your idea effectively to others. Based on this video you have both aspects under control and should be able to find investors later on. Your execution and professional attire tied the pitch together nicely. Good work.
William,
ReplyDeleteI am glad you were able to take your feedback from your first elevator pitch and use that to improve your knew one. Dressing formal was very guy, it shows you are presentable and allows people to be more willing to talk to you. Cleaning up to wording was a nice change and helped there to be more flow. Good job!